Here Be Dragons

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Postby Mimichan » Fri Dec 05, 2003 1:09 am

Hey! :hug:

I was wondering what had happened to you. Hopefully your PC is okay now.

Anyway...thank you for all the compliments. I know I don't normally write/submit so much at one time. What can I say? I got hit with the Mallet of Inspiration, evidently :hits_self
It was also a matter of wanting to move the story along a bit.
Hopefully I'll have more to post soon. Not promising anything though...
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby EireWolf » Fri Dec 05, 2003 6:52 pm

*gasp* The poor Guardian! *growls menacingly at the priestess of Dagoth*

Iesu! I'm so glad you're writing again! This is so good... :jump:
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Here Be Dragons (cont'd)

Postby Mimichan » Sat Dec 13, 2003 7:31 pm

*Ta DA!..I hope this is acceptable...or at least passable. So far all of the comments have been very supportive and friendly. However, I am sure this could be alot better. Certain things I am already aware of--such as, the change of voice/style; continuity problems; and the fact that I seem to forget to indent between dialogues. But if anyone has any suggestions or constructive comments (other than the ones I've mentioned) that they think would help me improve as a "writer" then I would really appreciate hearing from you. (sigh) I realize I'm opening myself up here, so please be nice...*

Faien'nithayah flew along the river that wound its way laboriously through the hills and valleys of Aiken'yar. She couldn't remember ever being allowed to wander this far from the lair without supervision before, but the den mothers were starting to become a bit less restrictive of late; and, she had decided to take advantage of her new-found freedom before they changed their minds. The young dragon breathed in the cool morning air, grateful to be away from the drudgery of lessons and lectures. There was so much to being a proper dragon, it seemed. One had to speak a certain way, and breathe a certain way, and so forth. Why couldn't things just be simple?, she wondered. Did life really need to be so complicated?

Fannie looked at her surroundings. The open fields below gave way to an entangled mass of vegetation just a few feet ahead. Beyond that, miles and miles of forest covered the ground until it disappeared into the horizon. The rumors from some of the older hatchlings was that somewhere within the forested area and a bit further along, was where the Humans lived. Fannie had never actually seen a human; however, judging from the horrific descriptions she'd been given from the den mothers, she didn't really want to.

A sudden flash of white caught her attention. Below, a frightened coney was scrambling for cover. Fannie didn't know what had spooked the rabbit , but she decided that it was a good opportunity to practice her hunting skills. She circled the area, her eyes scanning the ground below for her prey. Fannie had only been able to catch mice and squirrels thus far, and her newest target was definitely alot larger in comparison; however, the den mothers always told them that practice was the key to perfecting any skill.

Another flash of white and of something else she couldn't make out. The rabbit looked to be in range. She flapped her wings a few times to increase her velocity and swooped down. Fannie's outstretched talon had barely made contact with the creature, before she heard a loud hiss and it went tumbling away from her grasp with a piteous squeak. Fannie drew in abruptly to avoid stumbling and turned to see what had interrupted her attack.

The rabbit lay on its side only a few feet away-- an arrow protruding from its ribcage. She turned her head slowly and rested her gaze upon the strangest looking creature she'd ever seen. It stood upright and held a small bow in its...paws? Fannie couldn't tell what they were. They were certainly not talons. She stared at the creature..her nostrils working fervently to place its scent. It was like nothing she'd ever smelled before either. She sat back on her haunches, head cocked to one side, and tried to make sense of what her eyes beheld. It didn't look to be anything edible, although she'd seen hunters bring back prey much larger in the past.

The creature stood calmly, it's long brown hair stirring only slightly with the breeze. An oversized cloak hid most of its body from view. However, Fannie could see that it had no fur and it didn't seem to have scales either. She wondered briefly how it kept warm.

The seconds meandered past as Fannie mentally reviewed all of the creatures she'd heard about or seen in her lifetime. When it finally dawned on her what she was staring at, she shrank back and began to look around frantically. A human! She felt like such an idiot. How could she have forgotten the lessons? A dragon was never supposed to make itself visible to a human. If anyone found out about this....

"Shouldn't you disappear?", it asked.

Fannie's moment of panic was temporarily forgotten. It...spoke? "What did you say?"

It began to advance towards her. "I said," it repeated, "shouldn't you disappear?"
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Here Be Dragons (cont'd)

Postby Mimichan » Sat Dec 13, 2003 7:33 pm

Disappear? What was it talking about? And why was it approaching her? "S-stay where you are! Don't come any closer!" She bared her fangs, stretched her wings out menacingly, and hissed a warning.

The human stopped, but didn't seem troubled by her threatening display. It raised an eyebrow and gave her a small smile. "Hmm...that is very impressive", it said. "I bet you have a pretty strong flame as well."

"H-how? How is it that you can speak? You're a ..." she stammered.

"A human?" the creature finished the sentence for her. "Humans are quite capable of intelligent conversation, in spite of what you might have been told. But then, you seem to be the sort of dragon that likes to make up her own mind about things. So, have you decided whether or not I pose a threat to you?" It paused a moment before continuing.
" I would say no, since you've been standing there for several moments and not once have you attempted to disappear or fly away. Of course, the den mothers would be beside themselves if they knew about this."

Fannie shook her head. This was too much to take in all at once. "Are all humans like you?" she asked.

"Are all dragons like YOU?" came the reply. "Of course not. Though some are similar in ways. It really all depends upon what clan they come from."

Fannie nodded. No two dragons were alike...even dragons from the same clan. It made sense that humans would have differences as well. Fannie relaxed her posture a bit. In spite of what she'd been taught, this human seemed intelligent and didn't give off any threatening odors. She knew she wasn't supposed to be having a conversation with it, but the creature was so intriguing she couldn't seem to help herself. In spite of its smaller size, it showed no fear. It didn't grunt or make obscene noises as she was taught, but it spoke to her calmly and as an equal.

"Fhaenang!" she exclaimed. "This isn't possible. I am dreaming."

The human answered her--this time in High Dragon. " No, you are not dreaming. Allow your mind to accept what the rest of your clan can not."

Fannie shook her head in disbelief.

"Come now, it's obvious I mean you no harm" the human continued. " Will you at least tell me your name?"

Without thinking she blurted out. "Faien'nithayah of Clan Aiken'yar."

It smiled. "You are well met. I am known as Mahtiin. They sent me out on hunt patrol", he said, pointing to the rabbit. "I don't usually come out this far since its so close to dragon territory, but something compelled me to follow a new path today. Perhaps the Spirit willed that we would meet, Faien'nithayah."

Fannie nodded politely. She really had no idea what it was talking about. "I think I'd better be going" she said. The den mothers would be in an uproar if she was late getting home. She backed away slowly, giving herself room for the takeoff.

"Well then...perhaps I will see you another time." The human bowed.

She paused to give it another glance and then took to the air. Fannie knew that no one could ever know of this encounter. None of her fellow clan members would understand. Fannie wasn't sure she understood it herself. So far, everything she'd learned about humans had been completely false--if the one she'd been speaking to a moment ago was typical of the species.

Fannie's curiosity began to take over. If the elder dragons and den mothers were incorrect about those things, what else could they be wrong about? The human--Mahtiin, it had called itself--was right. She was not a dragon to just blindly accept what she was told. Fannie decided it was time to investigate the matter and find out for herself what a human was really like. As she flew home, she began to formulate a plan to discover the nearest human village and learn what she could about these creatures.

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Outside, upon the fields of Aiken'yar, the Guardian groaned with pain. The impact of hitting the ground had knocked the wind out of her, but she struggled to get up and face her attacker. Mithaya managed to raise up on one elbow. There was a shout...she couldn't understand what was being said. And suddenly she felt the talons of her unseen foe knock her flat upon the ground and drive the dagger deeper still. She couldn't scream. The pain was too great. With the weight of the her assailant upon her, The Guardian could barely gasp for air.

Suddenly, the weight was lifted off. She gulped in vital oxygen like a fish out of water, too tired to move. The Guardian knew she was dying. She could feel her life force slowly diminishing with every second. What had happened? Who had attacked her? She heard voices...it sounded like a struggle of some sort. She strained to hear what was being said.

"Laike, hold her still!"

Ah...Tegaeya was giving commands. She was good at that. Laike must have pulled the enemy off of her. The Guardian decided she would have to thank her later for that. It was so cold. She began to shiver uncontrollably. Dark circles swam in front of her eyes. The ringing in her ears grew ever louder. Mithaya thought she heard the sounds of struggle. Then a cry of pain.

The last words that echoed in her ears before she faded away was..."Stop her! She's getting a--!"
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Tegaeya knelt before her friend. She hadn't been able to go to her right away and had tried everything in her power to stop the dragon who'd done this; but, in the end, the enemy had escaped. She glanced at Laike. The Thaiyli Master shook her head. Her grip had been tight. The assassin should not have been able to escape. It didn't make sense.

The Captain Commander placed a talon on the back of her old friends neck. There was no pulse. With a heavy sigh, Tegaeya grabbed hold of the dagger and removed it. One of her greatest friends, killed by a dagger.... a dagger that only a High Priestess used. The blade fell numbly from her claw. "Come" she said. "The Queen Mother must know of this. She will need to appoint another Guardian for our clan and prepare herself for the Death Ceremony."

Tegaeya turned from the lifeless figure and walked away.
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby Razgriz » Sat Dec 13, 2003 7:41 pm

It looks good, the end is very political intrigue esq. A nice followup. ^_^
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sat Dec 13, 2003 11:04 pm

*waaaaaa* I can't stop crying. Why? Why? Why? *sobs*

Okay, I'm cool. ^_^ I really liked the Guardian too (please tell me, will she return?). So, Iesu, that was a really great section. I am so hooked on your story. I came on, rather than going to bed when I saw you had posted more. *thumbs up*

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Mimichan » Sun Dec 14, 2003 9:40 pm

true_noir_chloe wrote:*waaaaaa* I can't stop crying. Why? Why? Why? *sobs*

Okay, I'm cool. ^_^ I really liked the Guardian too (please tell me, will she return?).



Hmmm..imagine me raising my eyebrow at you. Now then, do you really think I'm gonna just leave it like that?? HA! Silly Rabbit!!...*ahem* No, I have plans..I just need to work them out.

And yeah, I like the Guardian too. ^___^
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby EireWolf » Sun Dec 14, 2003 11:03 pm

*gasp* She can't just die!

Nice writing, Iesu. I like how we finally see Fanny's first meeting with the human from her point of view. :thumb:
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Postby Lochaber Axe » Mon Dec 15, 2003 7:51 am

The only problem I have with the flashback is that all that italics made my head hurt.

Good and speedy updates nevertheless.
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A great piece of writing

Postby true_noir_chloe » Tue Dec 30, 2003 10:27 pm

I'm bumping this up because I'd like for some of the new writers to see what a great story this is.

Iesu, where'd you go? I know you're around somewhere. ~-^ I hope to see you write some more soon. *hugs*

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Mimichan » Tue Dec 30, 2003 10:57 pm

How did this get way up here ^_^...*hugs* true noir you are such a sweetie.. Okay, I admit, lately I've had the blahs about this story. Gimme a couple of days and I'll try to have an update. Because the story is at a critical point..as far as the plot goes, I want it to be as good as it can be and I want to get the message across in a way that makes sense: ie, my perfectionism is getting in the way of my writing. I can't find the words to express what I'm trying to say...hence the long wait. *sigh*
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Tue Dec 30, 2003 11:16 pm

I can understand you don't want to be rushed. I'm sorry if I'm making you feel rushed. You can let this slip down until you have an adequate installment; but be warned, I may bump it up again. *hehe* ^_^

*hugs*

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby EireWolf » Thu Jan 01, 2004 12:01 pm

Iesu_no_Senshi wrote:...my perfectionism is getting in the way...


I have that same problem, with writing and with art. :stressed: :sweat:

Just know that your devoted fans will keep checking for updates, but we'd rather it be from the heart than fast! :hug:
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Postby Mimichan » Fri Jan 02, 2004 2:31 am

EireWolf wrote:I have that same problem, with writing and with art. :stressed: :sweat:

Just know that your devoted fans will keep checking for updates, but we'd rather it be from the heart than fast! :hug:



:hug: awww geee ^_^

I appreciate that. My creative thoughts are in the "process" of coming together, so I think I'll have an update soon. As for writing from the heart..I always try to--good or bad. In fact, if my heart's not in it..I can't write.

hey, did I ever tell you I think you're an awesome artist? I especially love your dragons...:thumb: I would love to be able to draw or paint...or sculpt. But, the good Lord gave that gift to my brother. I have to say,though, that some of the online "how to draw manga/anime characters" sites have been very helpful. I can now draw an anime-style head...complete with BIG, Starry-looking Eyes!....it takes me forever plus an infinite amount of erasing...but by golly! It comes out looking sort-of-half-way-not-too-bad, ya know? ^_~
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby EireWolf » Fri Jan 02, 2004 6:18 pm

Iesu_no_Senshi wrote:hey, did I ever tell you I think you're an awesome artist? I especially love your dragons...:thumb: I would love to be able to draw or paint...or sculpt. But, the good Lord gave that gift to my brother. I have to say,though, that some of the online "how to draw manga/anime characters" sites have been very helpful. I can now draw an anime-style head...complete with BIG, Starry-looking Eyes!....it takes me forever plus an infinite amount of erasing...but by golly! It comes out looking sort-of-half-way-not-too-bad, ya know? ^_~


:red: :) Thanks, Iesu! :hug:

I couldn't always draw... I mean, I did anyway when I was a kid, and people told me I was good, but I look back now and laugh at my old drawings. It's not all talent; it's work too, and I had to get to a point where I was serious about it before I got good at it. And I still have so much to learn! I love art classes! :thumb: :sweat:

So, keep drawing, and soon it will be more than halfway not too bad! :grin: Meanwhile, your writing is awesome!
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Postby EireWolf » Thu Jan 15, 2004 9:41 pm

Iesu_no_Senshi wrote:I especially love your dragons...:thumb: I would love to be able to draw or paint...or sculpt.


I forgot to say that you paint/sculpt beautiful dragons with your words, even more than I can do with charcoal or clay. You give them personality and life, not just form.

Also, this is a blatant and unabashed attempt to encourage you to write. :) I'm addicted to your story. :sweat:
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Thu Jan 15, 2004 10:39 pm

Me too - fellow HBD addict. Where is Iesu? She's disappeared for awhile. I hope all is well with her and her computer.

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Icarus » Fri Jan 16, 2004 10:57 pm

*Thought it was an update*
*Bumps thread and walks away slightly disappointed*
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Here Be Dragons (contd)

Postby Mimichan » Mon Jan 19, 2004 3:58 am

*pulls the cobwebs from the doorway and enters her story* Okay..I know I said I'd have an update sooner..but LIFE has been happening to me lately....*bows frantically* Gomen Nasai Gomen Nasai...Gomen gomen gomen..! *sighs* I wrote this around 5-6am, completely blurry- eyed and frazzled, so if anything seems out of joint or just incomprehensible you can blame it on my lack of a decent night's sleep ^_~

An early morning fog embraced the land and gently caressed it with dewdrops that rolled like crystalline tears down the face of a dragon, who lay unmoving on the field of battle. The figure stood out in sharp contrast with its surroundings--a symbol of violence in the midst of a bright, new day. But it was not the only one. There were bodies strewn about everywhere, and their stillness spoke in volumes much greater than any war could have done.

The battle was over for the most part. The warriors had managed to push back a good portion of the invading clans, while the rest simply appeared to lose interest once the Rockbiter had been turned aside. This war, which had interrupted the land like a wave crashing upon the shore, had ended just as quickly. Whatever the force was that had compelled the battle had evidently gone searching for new mischief. What was left was the flotsam and jetsam of a brief skirmish that had changed the face of Clan Aiken'yar forever. Indeed, though the casualties were thankfully few, they had suffered a loss that would take some time to recover from.

The Guardian was dead. News of the tragedy had spread quickly from one dragon to the next, and by the time Tegaeya had reached the Queen half of the Clan had already been informed. However, it wasn't until the death knell began to ring throughout the lair that anyone truly believed it. Tegaeya looked at the dagger. The inscription engraved along the hilt stood in stark relief against the obsidian background. She ran a talon along it, sounding out the ancient tongue:

Kei Hesud Daf Thihemora Fhuirr.
Than Fhuirr Iaghed Mai Gath.
Ar Gath Iaghed Mai II.


"The Blood That Flows Is Life. All Life Belongs To Death. And Death Belongs To Me." Tegaeya read the words slowly, the truth of them leaving a bitter taste in her mouth. She had intended to hand the offensive blade over to the Queen. It was hardly a weapon she desired and would only hold painful memories for her now. Yet, when the moment came she found that she could not. Something told her, as she felt the keen scrutiny of Maisige...ever present and ever lurking at the Queen's side...to hold her peace. Thus, the dagger had been neatly tucked away before the Queen Mother, or worse--the High Priestess, had taken notice of it. Tegaeya sighed. What was to be done? She didn't really want the dagger. But she couldn't return it to the Temple without being questioned.

The Captain Commander shook off her dark contemplations and put the dagger away once more. She had requested permission to gather the body from the fields with the help of a few of Maisige's acolytes. It wasn't something a dragon in Tegaeya's position was required to do. Normally, the High Priestess took care of these matters. Or at the very least she could have sent her apprentice, Ahnaii, to see to it. But, while she cared for every dragon in the Clan, this time it was different.

This was not some random dragon..fallen in battle. This was her friend. They had practically hatched together--her, Mithaya...and...Mathain. Tegaeya moved purposefully toward her destination. Losing Mathain had been hard enough. Now that Mithaya was gone she felt utterly alone. And the most frustrating thing was the knowledge that she would probably never get a chance to avenge her friend's death. She'd sent out scouts immediately to see if anything could be found, but in her heart she knew it was a fruitless effort. The assassin hadn't run off--she'd simply vanished.

Upon reaching the lifeless form, Tegaeya stopped and knelt. The body needed to be placed on a woven stretcher and arranged properly before it was brought into the temple. Once everything was prepared, the High Priestess would perform the Death Ceremony and the body would be taken to the Burial Caves where it would find eternal rest. Tegaeya had never questioned what came after death. Once upon at time, the Dragons of Aiken'yar had believed in a Great Father...A Great Red Dragon from which All other Dragons had come. But after a while, they had put aside such childish notions and embraced the gods within themselves. Indeed, that was the message she had been taught from the beginning-- the greatness of self. It seemed to her that the only drawback was that one did not achieve greatness in life, but rather all reward and honor and godhood came afterward. Death was merely a birth canal that led to a divine existence..or so Maisige always claimed. The life that one lived ultimately determined the status they would enjoy in the hereafter, which was why no one in the Clan ever esteemed themselves more highly than another and all bowed their heads in obedience to the Queen.

She turned to the two acolytes and instructed them to lay the stretcher down. The weavers had created a sturdy, yet flexible platform out of some type of plant material she couldn't name, but it was very well done and she found herself admiring it's multi-colored hues briefly before setting her mind to the task at hand. Now that she was there, she couldn't seem to look at her friend. It wasn't the sight of death. Tegaeya had seen that before. She'd seen much worse, actually. Still, a part of her refused to accept what she knew to be true and stubbornly held to the foolish notion that as long as she didn't SEE the body, her friend wasn't really dead. Tegaeya turned her back after briefly motioning to the two who had accompanied her.

"I'm sorry, Mithaya. I just can't see you like that. Not right now." She whispered, her voice barely audible.

The acolytes, busily adjusting the harnessess that the stretcher would be attached to, never noticed she'd said anything. Tegaeya closed her eyes and felt the wind upon her brow. The other two were having some difficulty tightening the straps and were currently focusing all of their attention upon that particular task. Thus it was, that although there were three to bear witness...none of them saw the slight twitch of the body which lay so seemingly inert on the ground before them. None of them saw a talon flex slowly. And none of them heard the faint sigh of exhalation--so soft that it was barely noticeable. The sun rose a little higher and the fog began to lift.
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Mon Jan 19, 2004 7:47 am

:jump: :rock: :P :) :grin: :hug:
Yippee!

Iesu, you're back and your writing is fantastic! It was well worth the wait. Great prose.:thumb:

And, she's alive - yes!

Do I have a lot of exclamation marks? You bet. You write really well between 5 - 6 a.m.;)

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby EireWolf » Mon Jan 19, 2004 9:54 am

:dance: :jump: :dance: :jump: :dance: :jump: :dance: ... you get the idea. :grin:

I knew it! I knew it! I knew she couldn't be dead!

And the Guardian is alive too! :jump: hehe

Welcome back, Iesu!
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Postby Icarus » Mon Jan 19, 2004 3:28 pm

*Suggests forming a ring and dancing around Iesu to celebrate her return*

Please note that the above is not sarcasm.
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Postby Razgriz » Mon Jan 19, 2004 3:57 pm

Very awesome chapter! :thumb:
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Mon Jan 19, 2004 8:26 pm

I'm with Icarus.:dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: :dance: All you bananas hold hands.

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Here Be Dragons (cont)

Postby Mimichan » Mon Jan 19, 2004 11:20 pm

Thank you all so much for the nice comments. I am truly grateful for the positive feedback, and even more grateful that people actually seem to enjoy my story. ^_^ Anyway, here is the next installment...hope you like. Oh, and by the way, if anyone has suggestions or constructive criticism that they think would help me improve then by all means feel free to share them with me. Then, if I ever have an actual novel someday, I can dedicate it to you and whatever the advice was that you'd given me ^_~

Maisige worked diligently in preparation of the ceremony. Because the obsidian dagger had gone missing, there were some minor adjustments that had to be made. The Guardian's body would not be sent to the Burial Caves with the ritual scars that were normally due a dragon of her station. The High Priestess knew that there was no real point to it other than holding fast to what little bit of superstition the Clan still had, but the Clan expected certain things--even if those things happened to be completely useless. Maisige, herself, might have admitted as much had anyone asked.

The body was only a shell and whatever it was that had made the Guardian who she was was well and gone now. Of course, ceremonies such as these were what gave Maisige the power she enjoyed. In the eyes of the clan, she was the gatekeeper of the life to come. Nobody simply passed from one realm to the next with their own ability--it took the aid of a priestess to prepare them and send them off properly. Under the circumstances, however, Maisige would never have had the time to see to all of the fallen dragons that day, so she was grateful for the lesser priestesses and acolytes who had taken responsibility for the rest of the slain.

The High Priestess turned her attention to the lifeless form before her. She hadn't anticipated this. It had become obvious at her last summons that the Council was displeased with her. They had mentioned the potential threat that the Guardian could become, but Maisige hadn't thought that they would kill her. The danger she'd posed to them was all based on speculation and what ifs, there had been no concrete proof to warrant such a deed. But she had found that the Council was quite capable of acting rashly and did so with regularity. Maisige often got the impression that much of the decisions that were made were done on a whim and not out of any divine knowledge or wisdom.

The Guardian had lost her life merely because she might have remembered, someday, that all was not as it seemed. The spell of forgetting had been the best solution at the time. Mithaya had always been especially stubborn and reasoning with her had been next to impossible. She had adamantly refused to accept that Mathain's exile was just or necessary. She had argued and threatened and had even attempted to follow after him. It became evident that the male had brainwashed her somehow and that normal methods of persuasion would not work. Maisige had tried everything. She had tried logic and debate, confining her to the lair under heavy guard, and getting the Battle Mistress to increase her daily workload and exercises. Nothing had worked. In the end, Maisige had called upon a dark power that few realized she had and the issue of Mathain had ended forever. Well, at least they had left the other dragon to her. No doubt she was still in the dungeon. The Queen Mother had planned on seeing her later, but under the circumstances, Maisige was pretty certain that the young dragon might have to wait it out just a bit longer.

She reached out a claw to grasp the Guardian's face. The wound that the former protector of the Clan had recieved had already been taken care of and the body clothed in a burial garment. More ancient superstition that declared one should not enter the next life wounded, unadorned, or naked. Although Maisige wasn't able to carve the symbols into the Guardian's flesh as was customary, she decided to try and appease the Clan by at least painting them on with redberry dye.

Her claws made contact with a face that should have been cold and lifeless. She gasped in surprise. It was hot to the touch. What could this mean? She placed a talon at the base of the Guardian's neck but felt nothing. There was no pulse...and the Guardian had made no noise nor had she moved in all this time.... Yet her skin burned with a feverish life. Maisige moved to the end of the table and clasped the Guardian's foot firmly between her claws. It was here that a dragon's life-beat was strongest. Again she felt nothing. She waited a moment to be sure and then, after what seemed an eternity, she felt a faint thump. And then another. It seemed that the Captain Commander had been mistaken. No doubt she had forgotten to check more accurately in her grief. The Guardian was not dead. Not at all.

But if she wasn't now, she would be once the Council found out. Maisige shook her head. The High Priestess had never had anything against the Guardian personally. As much as she craved power, she did not wish the younger dragon any ill. And it seemed ridiculous to kill her over some childhood friend's fixation with humans. The human race was no threat, in her opinion, regardless that most of the Overlords in the Council seemed to think so. And there point of view was always held above her own. The Council viewed the Guardian as a threat and therefore, she was. There was nothing Maisige could do. She had already lost favor with her lord. Aidomar had been merciful thus far, but if he were to discover a Guardian with life still in her....well, Maisige was the one he would most likely take it out on.

She leaned in and whispered in the Guardian's ear. "I have no desire to kill you. Please believe me when I say that it is nothing personal, but the masters that I serve are much offended by you. No doubt you would not last very long if I allowed you to stay here. I do not know if you can hear me, but I have cut myself off from my lord to speak with you. This will have to be brief as I cannot stray too long from his presence before he notices and starts to get suspicious of me. I am giving you an opportunity for life, Mithaya. I hope that you will make your decision wisely, for if you ever attempt to return here I will have no choice but to have you killed. You are old enough, I think, to survive on your own. The time has come to say farewell."

The High Priestess dipped a talon in a jar filled with redberry dye and began to paint the ancient symbols on the body that was laid out before her. Afterwards, she would dress the wound more properly, and dose the Guardian with herbs to eliminate her fever. A few days supply of dried meat and water could be placed in the deep pockets of the burial garment, but once Mithaya was out of the lair it would be up to her to actually survive. The High Priestess finished the last stroke of dye upon the Guardian's brow. She straightened and examined her handiwork. Perfect. Wiping her talons on a piece of cloth, she walked out of the preparation room. There was still much that needed to be done.
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby Icarus » Tue Jan 20, 2004 6:22 am

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Postby true_noir_chloe » Tue Jan 20, 2004 2:01 pm

Now, I'm at the edge of my seat. This story is getting sooooo good. ^_^

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby EireWolf » Tue Jan 20, 2004 5:38 pm

OooOOOooooh! *runs around in circles with excitement*

This is awesome.
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Postby Razgriz » Tue Jan 20, 2004 7:57 pm

Ooooo, the plot thickens : D very good imagery.
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Postby Mimichan » Thu Jan 22, 2004 8:48 pm

Thanks everyone^_^ I am working on another update now, so hopefully tomorrow I'll have more to put up.
Btw..You guys didn't really think I'd kill the Guardian did you? ^_~
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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