I'm doing an essay. Does this sentence sound right to you guys
[font='Times New Roman']With technology, the Deaf community is now better able to connect with their community and the world around them.[/font]
[font='Times New Roman'][/font]
[font='Times New Roman']Its the beginning sentence for one of the paragraphs[/font]
hey
8 posts •
Page 1 of 1
hey
Come check my facebook fan page here If you want to see some great photography and art!
I am currently on my 4th draft of the script for Canvas! Canvas is a watercolor animated short about how everything declares of a Creator and how everything happens for a reason. If anyone would like to help by sending me resources on watercolor or animation it would be greatly appreciated!
I am also on my 1st draft of a short live-action Romcom called "Behind Every Good Man! Behind Every Good Man is about a Bride-to-be, Evelyn, who must stop her Mother-in-Law, Pamela, from living her dream wedding through Evelyn's. Along the way she learns what it means to be a Woman of Integrity today! If anyone wants to help let me know!
_____________________________
I am currently on my 4th draft of the script for Canvas! Canvas is a watercolor animated short about how everything declares of a Creator and how everything happens for a reason. If anyone would like to help by sending me resources on watercolor or animation it would be greatly appreciated!
I am also on my 1st draft of a short live-action Romcom called "Behind Every Good Man! Behind Every Good Man is about a Bride-to-be, Evelyn, who must stop her Mother-in-Law, Pamela, from living her dream wedding through Evelyn's. Along the way she learns what it means to be a Woman of Integrity today! If anyone wants to help let me know!
_____________________________
-
firestorm - Posts: 731
- Joined: Fri Jul 11, 2003 1:00 am
- Location: Lovin the Miami Heat. And I ain't talking about the basketball team :3
I'd change the first bit: with today's new techonology.
--To Write Love on Her Arms
"That time and absence proves - Rather helps than hurts to love."
"Feelings, emotions, they are good, but they cannot be Love's foundation. When of Love, these things last. When of romance, these things end."
"Love has nothing to do with what you are expecting to get, it's what you are expected to give -- which is everything."
"That time and absence proves - Rather helps than hurts to love."
"Feelings, emotions, they are good, but they cannot be Love's foundation. When of Love, these things last. When of romance, these things end."
"Love has nothing to do with what you are expecting to get, it's what you are expected to give -- which is everything."
-
ZiP - Posts: 1205
- Joined: Mon Sep 15, 2003 10:00 am
- Location: I could be anywhere, even Indiana
With today's new technology, the Deaf community is now able to better connect with their community and the world around them.
That's what I think anyway
Edit: it may also look better as "With today's new technology, the Deaf community is now able to better communicate with their community and the world around them." depending on the structure of the rest of the paragraph
That's what I think anyway
Edit: it may also look better as "With today's new technology, the Deaf community is now able to better communicate with their community and the world around them." depending on the structure of the rest of the paragraph
- Demosthenes
- Posts: 11
- Joined: Mon Jul 18, 2005 6:57 am
You don't need to capitalize the word "deaf". Just my advice. 
[color=RoyalBlue]@)}~`,~ [/color]Carry this rose in your signature as thanks to Inkhana, for all she has done for us in the past.Even though she is no longer a moderator, she has done an awful lot for us while she was and she deserves thanks. ^_^
- TheMelodyMaker
- Posts: 1904
- Joined: Sun Jul 20, 2003 10:13 pm
TheMelodyMaker wrote:You don't need to capitalize the word "deaf". Just my advice.
Can't believe I missed that. Must mean it's time to sleep hehe
- Demosthenes
- Posts: 11
- Joined: Mon Jul 18, 2005 6:57 am
Hello, Owner!
I can't see anything wrong with it. It sounds awesome. But if it doesn't sound right to you there is always the possibility of flipping it around a little or mess with the words.
The deaf community is now better able to connect with their community and the world around them due to technological advancements.
What are you exploring about technology/ the deaf community in your essay? It sound like a really interesting subject and reminds me of a documentary for my Media Studies class where we look at how people with disabilities relate to the rest of their community, their struggles with people's attitudes, their successes, etc.
I can't see anything wrong with it. It sounds awesome. But if it doesn't sound right to you there is always the possibility of flipping it around a little or mess with the words.
The deaf community is now better able to connect with their community and the world around them due to technological advancements.
What are you exploring about technology/ the deaf community in your essay? It sound like a really interesting subject and reminds me of a documentary for my Media Studies class where we look at how people with disabilities relate to the rest of their community, their struggles with people's attitudes, their successes, etc.
---
[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
A sci-fi drama webcomic updating Thursdays.
PG-13. Rating description here.
---
[SIGPIC][/SIGPIC]
A sci-fi drama webcomic updating Thursdays.
PG-13. Rating description here.
---
-
CreatureArt - Posts: 1107
- Joined: Sun Oct 24, 2004 12:11 pm
- Location: Studentville, New Zealand
Sounds good so far... though I'd say its either 'deaf community' or 'Deaf Community', depending on whether you're talking about a specific group or not. ...Actually, I think 'deaf community' is probably right.
Yes, what exactly are you doing it on? It does sound interesting. And is there anything else you need help, advice, or just a sounding board on?
Yes, what exactly are you doing it on? It does sound interesting. And is there anything else you need help, advice, or just a sounding board on?
(0)>
((_\//
mm
[Quote=Photosoph]Well, t'was a good deduction, Mr. Holmes! *salutes Mr. Myoti Sherlock Homes* [/QUOTE]
\(^_^)/
Still in rest and recovery mode. Posting may be sporadic at times.
((_\//
mm
[Quote=Photosoph]Well, t'was a good deduction, Mr. Holmes! *salutes Mr. Myoti Sherlock Homes* [/QUOTE]
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
\(^_^)/
Still in rest and recovery mode. Posting may be sporadic at times.
-
Photosoph - Posts: 1528
- Joined: Tue Jan 11, 2005 8:32 pm
- Location: Kiwiland... fighting for mankind in the battle of human vs. sheep.
8 posts •
Page 1 of 1
Who is online
Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 70 guests