The siren's song
When I was young
And lived at sea
I sat on a cliff
Looking into the ocean
Looking at the waves
Turning, Writhing
Each with a word
Making the lyrics
The sercret Lyrics
Of the siren's song
What do you think?
Poem: The siren's song
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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I like it, Siren, little sister dear.
In a world shrouded in mystery, the winds of change begin to blow.
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Taslin_Jewel - Posts: 342
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I wish I could write poems as good as you, Siren-chan.
And I knows who you are. Sarah-chan told - *Sarah-chan elbows her* Er, I figured it out all on my own... heh...
And I knows who you are. Sarah-chan told - *Sarah-chan elbows her* Er, I figured it out all on my own... heh...
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Spiritsword - Posts: 2102
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Happened to check my new thread "Meledriel" and i came upon the poem. Very good siren... reminds me of the brine on the lips old sea yarns such as " The Wreck of the Hesperus". So that is what " On a cliff" means. Doh! 
I personally wouldn't try to write poems, I just don't have the talent for all the mechanics a poem takes. I wouldn't mind to bad if you gave a little critiscm (constructive of course
) of my little Meledriel once I have the time to write it.
Waiting patiently for customers.
I personally wouldn't try to write poems, I just don't have the talent for all the mechanics a poem takes. I wouldn't mind to bad if you gave a little critiscm (constructive of course
) of my little Meledriel once I have the time to write it.
Waiting patiently for customers.
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Lochaber Axe - Posts: 730
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Lochaber Axe wrote:Happened to check my new thread "Meledriel" and i came upon the poem. Very good siren... reminds me of the brine on the lips old sea yarns such as " The Wreck of the Hesperus". So that is what " On a cliff" means. Doh!
Don't worry, I would find it confusing too if she wasn't my little sister.
In a world shrouded in mystery, the winds of change begin to blow.
A proud member of Star Wars: The Mandalorian Wars and Darklight: Chronicles of Tairis.
"I'm a warrior-hero-adventurer-goddess who CAN'T SWIM, okay?!?!" ~Skye of Lynlora, from the video game Darkened Skye
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Taslin_Jewel - Posts: 342
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It has a very beautiful and charming rhythm. 
I like it. 
I like it. [size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE
You see into the deepest part of me ---
beyond the fog I hide behind.
You cast your light upon the shadows
that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.
You ease the pain when I am hurting,
and morbid visions from my past
pierce into the realm of Reason
as though I danced on blades of glass.
You grant me strength when I have fallen
and, once again, I've lost my way.
You take my hand in Yours and lead me
into the promise of a brand new day.
You bring order to all my chaos,
yet set my well-laid plans awry.
You place me on a firm foundation ---
then give me wings so I can fly.
You sand away my roughened edges
and polish all the dullest parts
until I stand before Your presence...
a newly-sculpted work of art.
You see into the heart within me,
right through my motives and selfish will.
And yet, in spite of all You see
You say You love me even still.
~by D.M.~
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true_noir_chloe - Posts: 3091
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That was good. It almost sounds like a fragment of a larger work.
The scientific method," Thomas Henry Huxley once wrote, "is nothing but the normal working of the human mind." That is to say, when the mind is working; that is to say further, when it is engaged in corrrecting its mistakes. Taking this point of view, we may conclude that science is not physics, biology, or chemistry—is not even a "subject"—but a moral imperative drawn from a larger narrative whose purpose is to give perspective, balance, and humility to learning.
Neil Postman
(The End of Education)
Anti-intellectualism has been a constant thread winding its way through our political and cultural life, nurtured by the false notion that democracy means that my ignorance is just as good as your knowledge
Isaac Aasimov
Neil Postman
(The End of Education)
Anti-intellectualism has been a constant thread winding its way through our political and cultural life, nurtured by the false notion that democracy means that my ignorance is just as good as your knowledge
Isaac Aasimov
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Technomancer - Posts: 2379
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Nice! Feel free to post some more stuff ... like soon.
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Gypsy - Posts: 4056
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Gypsy wrote:Nice! Feel free to post some more stuff ... like soon.
I'm sorry. I am having a little problem with writers-block
Please give me time to think of ideas"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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you can describe how the sun rises or sets...???
I'm leaving CAA perminantly. i've wanted to do this for a long time but I've never gathered the courage to let go.
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Fsiphskilm - Posts: 3853
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Volt wrote:you can describe how the sun rises or sets...???
sure ise dawn and dusk
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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thank you Icarus it was very nice of all of you to anwser to my peom *looks at block of wood on desk* But i wound be able to write for a while.
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
- Joined: Wed Oct 29, 2003 2:32 pm
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As Winnie the Pooh says, "oh bother." You're not going to be able to write for awhile? Why not? Your poetry is so good.
[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE
You see into the deepest part of me ---
beyond the fog I hide behind.
You cast your light upon the shadows
that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.
You ease the pain when I am hurting,
and morbid visions from my past
pierce into the realm of Reason
as though I danced on blades of glass.
You grant me strength when I have fallen
and, once again, I've lost my way.
You take my hand in Yours and lead me
into the promise of a brand new day.
You bring order to all my chaos,
yet set my well-laid plans awry.
You place me on a firm foundation ---
then give me wings so I can fly.
You sand away my roughened edges
and polish all the dullest parts
until I stand before Your presence...
a newly-sculpted work of art.
You see into the heart within me,
right through my motives and selfish will.
And yet, in spite of all You see
You say You love me even still.
~by D.M.~
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true_noir_chloe - Posts: 3091
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I think it's great Siren. Awesome writing.
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Benu - Posts: 279
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true_noir_chloe wrote:As Winnie the Pooh says, "oh bother." You're not going to be able to write for awhile? Why not? Your poetry is so good.
I have writers block
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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Good work. Hopefully writer's block won't last too long. Sometimes I get stuck in that mode, or I just don't make time for writing. Keep it up though.
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Kokhiri Sojourn - Posts: 1215
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Here is a previous one I did in class
in the void
dreams fly past
falling into dark
like ripples on the water
dream shadows I once
knew gone forever
in th viod
Iam falling in the void
in the void
dreams fly past
falling into dark
like ripples on the water
dream shadows I once
knew gone forever
in th viod
Iam falling in the void
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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Kokhiri Sojourn - Posts: 1215
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thanks 
:RED:
:RED:"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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I am writing another it will be done sone
"The Great Mizuti never lie. Only sometimes. Occationally. Every now and then."
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
~The Great Mizuti from Baten Kaitos: Eternal Wings and the Lost Ocean
"Cast your eyes on the ocean,
Cast your soul to the sea.
When the dark night seems endless,
Please remember me."
Dante's Prayer by Loreena McKennitt
98% of the teenage population does or has tried smoking pot. If you're one of the 2% who hasn't, copy & paste this in your signature.
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Siren of Lyrics - Posts: 111
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Finally read your recent poem. Very good. ^_^
[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE
You see into the deepest part of me ---
beyond the fog I hide behind.
You cast your light upon the shadows
that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.
You ease the pain when I am hurting,
and morbid visions from my past
pierce into the realm of Reason
as though I danced on blades of glass.
You grant me strength when I have fallen
and, once again, I've lost my way.
You take my hand in Yours and lead me
into the promise of a brand new day.
You bring order to all my chaos,
yet set my well-laid plans awry.
You place me on a firm foundation ---
then give me wings so I can fly.
You sand away my roughened edges
and polish all the dullest parts
until I stand before Your presence...
a newly-sculpted work of art.
You see into the heart within me,
right through my motives and selfish will.
And yet, in spite of all You see
You say You love me even still.
~by D.M.~
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true_noir_chloe - Posts: 3091
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