True Talent
(OK! I know this story is really long.. and i apologize for that.. but yah.. Its a great story (so i have been told by my friends who critique it) so i thought i would share it with you lovely ppl!! I won't give anything away..but if anyone of you like art.. you will love this!! ^_^ ENJOY! and PLEASE Comment!! I love feedback, both good and bad! ^_^ )
Have you ever heard of those “underdog storiesâ€
TRUE TALENT (an original story by ME! sorry it is soo long.. ^_^;;
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ChristianKitsune - Posts: 5420
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The weekend went by slowly. Faith and I spent it watching DVDs. Her parents were away on a business trip, so she stayed with my family and me. We were both excited for Monday, and were pretty much on edge until then.
Finally, Monday afternoon came. Mr. Steve was giving us last-minute instructions on what to do. When everything was understood and the bell rang, we all met in the commons area, and met for some last-minute instructions via Brendan.
“Valerie, you and Kyle will begin by painting the outline for the facial features. Faith and I will come in with color, and then all of us will shade, and all of us will work on the background. Does that sound fair, everyone?â€
Finally, Monday afternoon came. Mr. Steve was giving us last-minute instructions on what to do. When everything was understood and the bell rang, we all met in the commons area, and met for some last-minute instructions via Brendan.
“Valerie, you and Kyle will begin by painting the outline for the facial features. Faith and I will come in with color, and then all of us will shade, and all of us will work on the background. Does that sound fair, everyone?â€
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ChristianKitsune - Posts: 5420
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Yumie wrote:Aside from some grammatical errors (I am such an English freak) it was good. Very original. Good job!
It has grammatical errors?! Wow.. My English teacher even proofread it for me.... O.o hmm oh well! Thanks! ^_^;;;
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ChristianKitsune - Posts: 5420
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Very nice, CR-chan! Your narrative style is very informal, which suits the subject matter well. And the characters were pretty good as well. Please post some more of your writing 
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"There is no surer sign of decay in a country than to see the rites of religion held in contempt." - Niccolo Machiavelli
"But even as Josue and Caleb declared that the Land of Promise was good and fair, and that the possession of it would be easy and pleasant; so the Holy Spirit, speaking by all the Saints, and our Blessed Lord Himself assure us that a devout life is a lovely, a pleasant, and a happy life." - from An Introduction to the Devout Life, by St. Francis de Sales
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"There is no surer sign of decay in a country than to see the rites of religion held in contempt." - Niccolo Machiavelli
"But even as Josue and Caleb declared that the Land of Promise was good and fair, and that the possession of it would be easy and pleasant; so the Holy Spirit, speaking by all the Saints, and our Blessed Lord Himself assure us that a devout life is a lovely, a pleasant, and a happy life." - from An Introduction to the Devout Life, by St. Francis de Sales
Loyal subject of Sakura-hime, the RP Princess.
CR-chan's faithful PNC.
FF-chan's NiichanB.
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Steeltemplar - Posts: 1373
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Steeltemplar wrote:Very nice, CR-chan! Your narrative style is very informal, which suits the subject matter well. And the characters were pretty good as well. Please post some more of your writing
Thanks!! ^_^! I appreciate that!! I love these characters...i draw them the most..
I am in the process of of another story.. it is a sci fi.. but i am still working on the plotlines.. and yes SteelTemplar.. there is more violence in it..at least that is what i plan.. i know how you guys love your action! (me too!)
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ChristianKitsune - Posts: 5420
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ChristianKitsune - Posts: 5420
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yay this is great and i've already told you this but i'll say it again, dont show me ur char's you drew and then use them for char's in a story i just knew that kyle was blind when i learned his name sorry if i'm sounding angry but hey i needed something to put since you commanded me to post here ^^ its an awsome story keep writing in the stick monkey chronicels though
FKA Mythmaster
Why must we be abandoned in times of need?
Do others not see when we yearn for their touch;
An insatiable hunger only they can feed.
Left alone with out their words – fallen into darkness.
Stumbling blindly without their light,
We fall and scream, knowing we've faced too much,
Knowing the only answer is flight.
Flight from the lives we once faced
And the joys and terrors others have brought.
Our time with them, a time of joy and life,
Wonder we all, was it for naught?
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Kiba-kun - Posts: 561
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I didn't know yo uwanted to read this story, myth! And you...flipped through my sketch book before I could stop you! *sooooob*
Ok, to make it up to you I will finish another chapter by next weekend!
Ok, to make it up to you I will finish another chapter by next weekend!
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ChristianKitsune - Posts: 5420
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you let me look at your sketch book i didnt purposly do it. well sorta but not really but sorta. YAAAAAAY!
FKA Mythmaster
Why must we be abandoned in times of need?
Do others not see when we yearn for their touch;
An insatiable hunger only they can feed.
Left alone with out their words – fallen into darkness.
Stumbling blindly without their light,
We fall and scream, knowing we've faced too much,
Knowing the only answer is flight.
Flight from the lives we once faced
And the joys and terrors others have brought.
Our time with them, a time of joy and life,
Wonder we all, was it for naught?
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Kiba-kun - Posts: 561
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mythmaster wrote:you let me look at your sketch book i didnt purposly do it. well sorta but not really but sorta. YAAAAAAY!
Hmm... you could have said no...but then I probably would have cried..
I KID! Sorry, I ruined it for you...
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ChristianKitsune - Posts: 5420
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dont worry you didnt ruin it at all
FKA Mythmaster
Why must we be abandoned in times of need?
Do others not see when we yearn for their touch;
An insatiable hunger only they can feed.
Left alone with out their words – fallen into darkness.
Stumbling blindly without their light,
We fall and scream, knowing we've faced too much,
Knowing the only answer is flight.
Flight from the lives we once faced
And the joys and terrors others have brought.
Our time with them, a time of joy and life,
Wonder we all, was it for naught?
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Kiba-kun - Posts: 561
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