A Bad poem/song about sin

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A Bad poem/song about sin

Postby Zarn Ishtare » Thu Jun 24, 2004 9:33 am

Deep inside of my soul there is a place that I hide all my sins, And this deep dark depressing hole is where this story begins. You see I and God weren't right at the time, and I was in a fight with him at the time, the kind He always wins?

Well, at this point Demon came and showed me all my sins. He gave me a list, and said "these you did commit." And told me that on this list were sins God would not omit. I looked upon the list and cried, seeing my soul burn. But it was at this point in the story that the tide of victory did turn. For I remembered His mercy great, wide, wonderful, true. And it was becuase of that that I can stand before you. I told the Demon who was me, that I was saved by Love, and that even the terrible Sword could not defeat the Mighty Dove.

And now I struggle with this pain, praying God to make it right. Before I am grasped, and stolen in the darkest night.


Zarn.
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Master Kenzo » Thu Jun 24, 2004 10:09 am

*Applauds* Excellent poem Zarn! Not only is it well written, but it packs a powerful message as well.
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Postby Zarn Ishtare » Thu Jun 24, 2004 12:31 pm

And I wasn't going to post anymore (I think that people who post on these threads they themselves made just to say, "awe shucks, its not that good" are trying to be humble while prideful) but....

I stood upon a high place, and saw, below, many devils, running, leaping, carousing in Sin. One looked up grinning, and said, "Comrade, Brother!"

Stephan Crane
(not me)
With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby Vash is a plant » Fri Jun 25, 2004 2:51 pm

wow.. That really is great... It shows a lot of emoution. :angel:
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Postby Angel37 » Sun Jun 27, 2004 4:57 pm

That hits home. I like, I like. You truly are a poet master. *bows* You've been upgraded to -sama just so you know...
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Postby Zarn Ishtare » Wed Nov 17, 2004 2:17 pm

With your doubt, all is comfort
We are all as we appear
No more questions left unanswered
No more wonder, no more fear
Nothing is beauty, nothing's feeling
Blood where there once was a soul
So I ask you, prove yourself
Make me believe that you are whole
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Postby harina » Fri Nov 26, 2004 1:11 pm

Wow. I like it.
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