lyrics to an unfinnished song

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lyrics to an unfinnished song

Postby Shinja » Sun Aug 22, 2004 1:33 am

Deep



Your anger is deep, you keep it locked away, with words you’d never say.
You try to laugh, you try to breathe, you try to be everything everyone else seems to be.
But deep down inside you know you cant hide from all the pain

You work hard to forget the nights, those dreams you knew all to well.
All your mistakes, all the lies you used to hide your self away.
You spend it all, to buy some time, time to be free.
But freedome comes from only one, one you cant seem to see.

And your only foolin yourself, actin like its all someone else. You walked the line
you done the time, and in your own mind you fell too far to be free.

Jesus save a poor retch like me, in this fallen world I cant see, in the darkness of my own sin,
I cant see where the light dosent shine in. deep deep in me

Deep I wonder why, I know the truth but I still lie, why I hurt the closest to me. Why I
sing your name but fail to do the same as you have tought me to be. Deep, deep in me
MATT
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Sun Aug 22, 2004 2:59 pm

Wow. Will read again later. Keep writing.
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

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Postby true_noir_chloe » Mon Aug 23, 2004 3:45 pm

Nice, I hope you finish your song. ^__^

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby ally-san » Mon Aug 23, 2004 3:53 pm

well i like it so far. i can really feel the emotion put into this song
"The only consolation I find in your immediate presence is your ultimate absence."

"Dream as if you'll live forever. Live as if you'll die today."

Lord I give you my heart
I give you my soul
I live for you alone
Every breathe that I take
Every moment I'm awake
Lord have your way in me..
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Postby Shinja » Mon Aug 23, 2004 8:02 pm

yeah, i wanted it to have a happy ending but, im not sure it will, also i have a problem with songs, i can write lyrics and i can write wordless songs, but i really stink at putting them togeather.
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