even more of my poetry

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even more of my poetry

Postby Rachel » Thu Jul 22, 2004 3:05 pm

haha okay, i know you're all wondering why hasn't rachel posted more of that excellent poetry of hers? well i've been wondering that myself too. so rather than resurrect seasons i've decided to make this here thread for you all to enjoy. so without further ado, i give you the poetry of rachel!!! i think this is one of my better ones anyways. here we go.

numb yourself

turn the radio on and
let the music was over you
covering the scars that
line your bloody wrists
try to numb yourself
as Stairway plays
and your mother screams
no one hears your cries
and they ignore your tears
the cresscendo builds
and your heart atrophys
try to numb yourself
the music fades away and
you slowly falls to the floor
you couldn't numb yourself
Bob Dylan wails


so there ya have it. i hope y'all enjoyed it.
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Postby Icarus » Thu Jul 22, 2004 3:15 pm

wow.
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Postby Rachel » Tue Jul 27, 2004 4:43 pm

gracias dear icky!
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Tue Jul 27, 2004 5:13 pm

sounds sad.
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

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It's cosplay, get used to it.

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Postby true_noir_chloe » Mon Aug 02, 2004 7:37 pm

Wow! I have to repeat what your brother said.

This is very good. I can hear this sung with a really hard rock beat in the background, or maybe something Bob Dylanny. ~_^

Anyways, I really did like this one very much. You're such a talent. ^___^

More, I say more, please.

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Rachel » Mon Aug 02, 2004 8:24 pm

thanks you guys :red: well i have to go to bed now. i'll post another one tomorrow
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Postby Icarus » Tue Aug 03, 2004 2:35 pm

sheherazade wrote:sounds sad.

Hers often are. If you like, here is a link to her old thread.

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asylum

Postby Rachel » Tue Aug 03, 2004 2:57 pm

ok so here is one that i wrote not too long ago. i think it's pretty sad, but then again i think most of my stuff is pretty sad. anyways here goes and i hope that y'all enjoy it.

asylum

pain echoes off of the bare walls
drowning out your silent plea
paint the floor with your fears
hide away from the shadows
that crawl across your mind
a dark night filters through
the iron barred windows
the voice inside your head
has become your only friend
red drips red from your wrists
onto the shackles chained around your feet
holding you in the corner of your cell
you're tto scared to beak free
safely inside your comfort zone
locked inside the prison you built
to escape what you can't face
the last feather falls from your wings
leaving you all alone
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Wed Aug 04, 2004 3:43 pm

A little dark, but really well done.
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

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It's cosplay, get used to it.

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Postby Rachel » Sat Aug 07, 2004 4:38 pm

ok so i don't have a poem to post this time, but i promise next time you will be glad that you waited. haha. probably not. i'm going to try my hand at writing a love song. hahahaha! yeah. if y'all hate it i won't blame ya.
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Postby Jaltus-bot » Sat Aug 07, 2004 4:40 pm

I'm sure it'll be good. I'll be looking forward to reading the song. Good luck and God bless. :)
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

Asdvadz hedut ullah! (W. Armenian, "May God bless you!")

It's cosplay, get used to it.

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Postby Jaltus-bot » Sun Aug 22, 2004 3:00 pm

When's the next poem going to be?
When I feel blue, I start breathing again.

Asdvadz hedut ullah! (W. Armenian, "May God bless you!")

It's cosplay, get used to it.

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"One of the nice things about diseases of the brain is they tend to slip your mind." Colbert
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Sun Aug 22, 2004 3:21 pm

Hey Rachel, I had to log back in when I read "Asylum." Woohoo, that was a good one!:rock: It really captured the essence and mood. Keep writing them.:hug:

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Rachel » Tue Aug 31, 2004 6:08 pm

Thanks you guys...uhh...gals...hehe. I'm not sure when I'll post another poem. I'm in the process (process yeah right) of writing another one right now so I should post it soon. It might be a while though because I have to work on my term theme for english. Later peeps! Holla! Hehe.
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