Poem - "Eternal Time"

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Poem - "Eternal Time"

Postby Staci » Fri Feb 27, 2004 4:18 pm

Eternal Time

Nighttime;
Liquid moonbeams trickle downward
To illumine a fragrant path.
Swishes of silk and slaps of slippers
Disturb the peaceful way.


Alone time;
The young Queen with wise gaze
Wrings her slender hands.
Her crimson garb matches personality,
Passion for whom she awaits.


Delicate time;
From shadowed trees steps a man
In silver armor, black cape.
His arms encircle his Queen's waist
And lips seek her neck.


Precious time;
She gasps and sinks against him,
Pleased at his timely arrival.
She turns in his grasp and smiles
As fingers touch his face.


Required time;
"Betrothed," he whispers respectfully
And kneels to kiss her hand.
"What is your bidding, my Queen,"
He asks with upturned eyes.


Memorable time;
"Sweep me away, gentle Knight,
From the darkness of dusk.
Bring me into a peaceful world lit
By our beating hearts."


Cherished time;
Smiles brighten as he scoops her up
And off toward private alcove.
True love beckons their alike souls
To become but one.


Eternal time;
One faithful Knight and a regal Queen,
Destined lovers, mates forever.
Entwined together by heart strings
Forged of metal and silk.


~*~*~*~*~*~*~

I wrote this poem for my fiance quite a while ago - we refer to each others as "Knight" and "Queen". Hehehe - I hope everyone likes it!
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Postby Emanku » Fri Feb 27, 2004 4:29 pm

Most impressive! That poem has excellent flow, and is very moving. You really put all your heart into it, that's what really matters. I give this poem two thumbs up. (I would give more but that's all I have, lol)
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Postby ShiroiHikari » Fri Feb 27, 2004 5:05 pm

Woooooow. You're very good with words. How pretty ^_^ Show us more stuff :D
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Fri Feb 27, 2004 8:40 pm

That poem was very beautiful; I'm with Shiroi, show us more stuff. Also, is your fiance now your husband? ^_^

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby YesIExist » Fri Feb 27, 2004 10:29 pm

Very romantic and in-the-moment.
Idle hands are indeed the devil's playground. -_- :bang:
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Postby EireWolf » Fri Feb 27, 2004 10:38 pm

Tres romantique! ^_^ Beautiful imagery.
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Postby Staci » Sat Feb 28, 2004 6:15 am

true_noir_chloe wrote:Also, is your fiance now your husband? ^_^

Nope, he's still just my fiance. We will be getting married September 12th, 2004, though. ^_^
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Postby YesIExist » Sat Feb 28, 2004 9:43 pm

How did you choose the date you set? I'm still considering dates for myself.
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Postby Staci » Sun Feb 29, 2004 6:48 am

YesIExist wrote:How did you choose the date you set? I'm still considering dates for myself.

September 12th, 2003, is the day that my hunnie proposed to me. We thought it would be fitting to celebrate it the next year and every year after that by getting married on said date. ~_~
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Postby churchgirl111 » Sun Feb 29, 2004 7:02 pm

I love the poem!
I like the narrative style and the straight poetry flow (not metaphorical and stuff...can't sit for an hour to figure it out ^_^)
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