A Poem By Vash

[Zilch]

more of my earlier stuff...

Blind

So once again
I toe the line of change
So once more
Truth has become strange
So once again
There's a decision to make
So once more
Fear, I can't shake

A foul taste in my mouth
Now turns to blood
The horrors of earth
Now turn to flood
I see all the demons
Now chasing me
It's a sad, sad world
When I strive just to be

So once again
I see all that ends
So once more
Truth is starting to bend
So once again
My soul's at stake
So once more
Demons claws, they rake

Blind!
Can't see, help, I'm
Blind!
Grab my hand, I'm
Blind!
Lead me...home...

[churchgirl111]

hmmm...i love the poem just from a poetic perception but my mind couldn't help adding punk music to it...
made me wanna sing...

that would have been really scary..glass shattering..children screaming..all from me..hehehe won't be quiting my day job anytime soon..heheeh

and for your other two poems...i don't see a rhythm problem at all..actually having a longer sentence short sentence structure made it flow well...
it is nice to see your variety if style...

YEAH THE VASH STYLE!!!! BANANA!

[Zilch]

Hey, nothing wrong with punk! Actually, I was going for a hardcore feel for this song/poem.

[YesIExist]

*hands Vash a stick to poke around with*

[Zilch]

harhar. You're so funny..okay, so that was funny...

Anyway...

Impromptu

Dumped inside this world
No clue what to do
Given a life we don't want
There is no book of rules
We had no choice in the matter
There wasn't a do or don't
We are here despite our lament
There wasn't any "I won't!"
The fact of the matter is
We stuck here, nevertheless,
The abberation of our sins
Will lead us to repent
The only choice we have
Is either do or die
So when your time is over
Your body alone will lie
Where your soul is headed
Most people won't really care
But I can see the pain
In your burden-weary stare
All the world, it crumbles
Beneath our tired feet
All we can do is wait
For triumph or defeat

[churchgirl111]

oooooo @_@
I love it!!!
COPYRIGHT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! and make it a song while your at it!!!
heheheehe I can't say anything more...oh wait yes I can
BANANA!

[Zilch]

(sighs at the banana-virus-infected Churchgirl)

Insanity

Floating somethings
Around my head
To mock
To invoke fear
My mind isn't mine any more
It's theirs
When they come

All around me
My past
My misdeeds fall on me
Unbearable
Back gives out
Lying beneath this weight
Gasping

Red tints everything I touch
Blood
From me?
Rising again to fall
Random thoughts
Consume me
Freedom?

My weight
My burden
My soul
My mind
My past
My cry
My tourniquet

[Saint Kevin]

Regardless of odds
Regardless of old wounds still healing
Regardless of the pain I feel when I see you
You have become my beautiful paranoid

"beautiful paranoia" sounds a bit better to me than beautiful paranoid."

Kawaii - from what I gather, means cute.

If you're concerned with your rhythm problems, perhaps you could try to edit your old stuff. There's nothing wrong with going back, and perhaps it could even lead to more inspiration, or complete (and much better) rewrites. Just a suggestion. Keep it up, Aaron. Great stuff, man. Definitely inspiring to me, if not personally, then at least creatively.

[Zilch]

thank you for bringing that up. That was a spelling error.(runs off to correct it)Thanks for you compliments and suggestion. I'll do it someday when I have nothing better to write...

[Zilch]

Die To Me

I see you and my pain flares
Pain of my past
Of what I did to you
Pain of my guilt
I can't live with me
With what I did to you
Die to me
I see you and I forget
My forgiveness
That I'm free of this
My unforgiveness
Of myself, my actions
The way I hurt you
Die to me
I see you and I hate
My carnal mind
That whispers madness
My carnal dispostion
That caused me to do this
The way I killed you
Die to me...

[Yamato145]

Author pemits use of poems, but asks for writing credit.-Aaron Waite

Fly

I say hello to the ceiling again
It's been so long...
When did I last call you my Friend?
Let alone my Father?
Can you really hear me
When I yell?
When my cries echo back at me?
Will you listen when I'm angry?

Are you there, somewhere above
These rafters that keep me
From flying to you
From flying into your arms
I feel so alone...
Could you reach down
And at least let me know you care?

I speak softly to the sky so blue
When was it that
I last looked in awe at your creation
Instead of asking
Why is there pain
In this life?
When will I feel at peace again?
When will these shackles break?

Are you there, somewhere above
These rafters that keep me
From flying to you
From flying into your arms
Could you reach down
And at least let me know you care?

The roof is deaf
The sky is bleak
But I know the One above this earth
And He cares
And He cries
With me

Are you there, somewhere above
These rafters that keep me
From flying to you
From flying into your arms
Could you reach down
And at least let me know you care?

But you're still faithful
As you see where the road takes me,
And you smile
Knowing it's worth it
Even if I don't...

... THAT IS ... AWESOME!!! IT ROCKED!!!
its so good i lick it!!!
cool poem man

[Zilch]

AHHH!! ANOTHER BANANA VIRUS INFECTED POSTER!!!

Anyway, thank you, but(points upward)all the glory goes up there.

[YesIExist]

"beautiful paranoia" sounds a bit better to me than beautiful paranoid."

maybe because it focuses on the action, rather than the person

[YesIExist]

Die To Me

I see you and my pain flares
Pain of my past
Of what I did to you
Pain of my guilt
I can't live with me
With what I did to you
Die to me
I see you and I forget
My forgiveness
That I'm free of this
My unforgiveness
Of myself, my actions
The way I hurt you
Die to me
I see you and I hate
My carnal mind
That whispers madness
My carnal dispostion
That caused me to do this
The way I killed you
Die to me...

sounds regretful

[Zilch]

Sadly, it is. It deals with regret, guilt, and remorse over hurting someone, and you just want them to leave so you're not constantly reminded of what you did.

STOP LICKING MY SONG/POEMS!

[Zilch]

Aftermath

Why they've have gone we'll never know,
God decreed they had to go
Fighting to the bitter end
Country and innocents they did defend
You came back home, now we see
The payment for our liberty
The scars you bear we'll never know
We're just glad you made it home

Dedicated to the American soldiers who made the ultimate sacrifice to preserve our freedom.

[Zilch]

Somebody's Secret

Something harmful haunts you
What is it, exactly?
Is it fear?
Is it pride?
What are keeping from me?
Something keeps you from telling me the truth
It kills me inside
Why won't you drop that burden on my shoulders?
My yoke is easy
My burden is light
You're struggling
I, of all people, see that
But why do you hide it from me?
I love you enough to die
But you won't let me help?
Why do you run from me?
I love you too much
Even though chastisment may be in order
You will always be
My son

[YesIExist]

STOP LICKING MY SONG/POEMS!

what:o

[Zilch]

what:o

>>> its so good i lick it!!!<<<

Yamato's quote. Never mind...

[Zilch]

Something that popped in my head...

I am a man
Nothing more
Nothing less
So therefore
I am content

[YesIExist]

>>> its so good i lick it!!!<<<

Yamato's quote. Never mind...

eeeeeeeeewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Zilch]

Zombie

Falling
Crashing
Burning
Living while dying
Can you hear my scream?
Stress becomes me
To a point of breaking
Despairing...

Ground
Beaten
Despised
All by mankind
Can you hear my cry?
Burdens becomes me
To a point of pain
Despairing...

[Zilch]

As a teen, I like to write on things teens go through everyday...

(untitled as of yet)

You took my breath away
And I'm still standing here
Not willing to move unless
I can conquer all my fear
You are the one I think of
Every day and every night
I don't mean to be obsessive
I don't mean to cause you fright
My good intentions are hidden
Behind my hard blue eyes
You don't see the pain I feel
Because I never cry
I feel completely stupid
Just talking to you now
I used to think you liked me
Now I'm wondering "How?"
I used to have a hope
It's all gone I guess
I'm feeling quite worn out
Unloved, unliked, useless
So I ask forgiveness
For all the times I stared
And I thank you for the times
You were the only one there
Although I wanted more
Friendship's all I have to give
So I guess I can leave now
I have a life to live...

[YesIExist]

awww... isn't that sweet.

[Mave]

Hey, this is AWESOME. I usually don't care for poetry or writings but your works speak emotions and messages to me. You've got me interested in writings, I think I'll wander around the Writing Forum more often! ^^ My fav. is Despite Beginnings and Prolix. Beautiful works, praise God for that!

[Zilch]

Thanks. But, (points up), everything goes up there.