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Grammar/punctuation help

PostPosted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 1:03 pm
by SnoringFrog
I'm working on some bios for a school webpage I'm doing, and I want to have all the English on it done correctly, but I feel like there's something wrong w/ my punctuation or my capitalization here, as I don't have much experience in typing degrees and whatnot.

[name] is originally from Oxnard, California. She has a Bachelors degree in life science with a minor in social science, a Masters degree in science education, and twelve years of teaching experience.


Is there anything wrong w/ that? Or is there anything that could be done in a more professional way? I want this to look as good as possible.

PostPosted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 4:33 pm
by Mithrandir
SnoringFrog (post: 1202685) wrote:[name] is originally from Oxnard, California. She has a Bachelors degree in life science with a minor in social science, a Masters degree in science education, and twelve years of teaching experience.



Hmm... You might consider switching it around a little, to make it less like a list:

"In addition to twelve years of teaching experience, [name] has attained a bachelors degree..."

or something like that. Multiple sentences can sometimes look more professional than a single, multi-topic one.

PostPosted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 4:55 pm
by ShiroiHikari
Also, "Bachelor's" and "Master's" have apostrophes.

PostPosted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 5:15 pm
by LadyRushia
I think the areas of study need to be capitalized.