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I need help. I'm writing an essay on reasons why teenagers easily fall into peer pressure and I have writing block I have a couple of paragraph's but I can't think of anything else the teacher said I can finish it by monday but I wanted to finish it by today, AND I HAVE A 1 PAGE STORY DUE TODAY FOR MY AMERICAN SIGN LANGUAGE CLASS IF ANYONE THAT IS ON NOW CAN HELP ME RIGHT NOW PLEASE REPLY AND HELP ME! I NEED AS MANY POINTS AND SUPPORTING DETAILS TO TALK ABOUT AS I CAN

Can we see what you have so far?

Try personal stories of when people tried to put peer preasure on you to conform to their standards.

Plus if you want to use some outside sources you can ask people for their stories of facing peer preasure. I know I have quite a few stories to tell.

Or Ray Stedman talks about peer preasure and Christians. He talks about how the Devil assails Christians through the world, with its monstrous pressure to keep in line, not to be different, and its ostracism of those who attempt to swim against the stream. You can read his views on the matter here:
http://www.pbc.org/dp/stedman/ephesians/0101.html

Gives me your thesis and I'll see if I can't give you some inspiration. I have had some expirance dealing with peer preausre, how to defeat it and what not, and I know of a few sources that can help, but I need to know your thesis statement first. (i.e. what is the point of the paper.)

Good luck
HS5000

here"s what i have so far (literally)

[font='Times New Roman']Peer pressure is one of the hardest obstacles to overcome in the average life of a High school/college student. More often than not Peer pressure has the disheartening ability to drag young adults down the dreary road of bad decisions. Surely, a friend leading another friend to God, or urging the friend to better his life in a way that is productive is not wrong. However, peer pressure does not always go down that road. Most peer pressure that teenagers face come from friends, who are a major influence on the lives of young people today. Because friends seem so important to teenagers, teens are more likely to fall into peer pressure from other teens either out of fear of what their friends might think about them, out of fear of being cast out from their group of friends, or by not being accepted.[/font]

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[font='Times New Roman']First of all, Teenagers sometimes give into peer pressure out of fear of what their peers might think of them. Teenagers fear that if they refuse what is being offered, they might lose their friends or their friends may see them as inferior or someone to make fun of. For example, if a teenager is being pressured into doing drugs by a dominant member of his group of friends, he is likely to give into peer pressure to avoid being made fun of or looked down upon by his friends. This fear teens have may be a result of how they see their friends treat others. If the leaders or other members of the group like pick on people or those they feel are inferior to them, the teen might be afraid that if he/she rebels against the peer pressure he/see might be picked on as well. The teen could be thinking that he might lose his friendship with them if he refuses to smoke. Teens fear that if they go against their peers their peers might shun them and cast them out from the group. No one wants to ever feel lonely or be ignored by their friends so of course teenagers would fear this as something that might happen. [/font]

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[color=black][font='Times New Roman'][size=100]Finally, teens have a want to be accepted by others. They will do anything to “fit inâ€

and here"s what i have for the story so far>




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Ok, first of all, have you written an otline? I'm not talking about anything majorly detailed here, but it seems like if you sat down and organized the lay out before you started, the flow of the whole paper would be smoother and just look more organized. As it is, it seems like you're stringing a bunch of thoughts together, and they're good thoughts, they just don't fit well. So I think if you thought out an outline first it would put you on the right track.

Other than that, I would try to come up with more colorful adjectives so you don't have to keep repeating the same words such as "road, "friends", and "teens". I know there are only so many words you can use, but it would make it sound less redundant if you were to do that. Try looking in a dictionary for synonyms or something. And beyond that, it is generally unnecessary to put "he/she" in formal writing. If you just put "he", your teacher will recognize that as being inclusive of both genders.)

Also, google peer pressure, see if you can find some examples or some expert opinions. Talk to friends and get first hand stories about how peer pressure affects them and how they handle it.

Sorry I can't be more in-depth here, I'm in a hurry to leave and I won't be back for a few hours, but if you need more help PM me and I'll see if I can think of anything else to help you while I'm out. Good luck!

(P.S. if you'd like me to and I have time later, I would be glad to proof-read it for you. I edit a lot of Osaka's writings, so I've gotten to be pretty good at it.)

Yumie wrote:Ok, first of all, have you written an otline? I'm not talking about anything majorly detailed here, but it seems like if you sat down and organized the lay out before you started, the flow of the whole paper would be smoother and just look more organized. As it is, it seems like you're stringing a bunch of thoughts together, and they're good thoughts, they just don't fit well. So I think if you thought out an outline first it would put you on the right track.

Other than that, I would try to come up with more colorful adjectives so you don't have to keep repeating the same words such as "road, "friends", and "teens". I know there are only so many words you can use, but it would make it sound less redundant if you were to do that. Try looking in a dictionary for synonyms or something. And beyond that, it is generally unnecessary to put "he/she" in formal writing. If you just put "he", your teacher will recognize that as being inclusive of both genders.)

Also, google peer pressure, see if you can find some examples or some expert opinions. Talk to friends and get first hand stories about how peer pressure affects them and how they handle it.

Sorry I can't be more in-depth here, I'm in a hurry to leave and I won't be back for a few hours, but if you need more help PM me and I'll see if I can think of anything else to help you while I'm out. Good luck!

(P.S. if you'd like me to and I have time later, I would be glad to proof-read it for you. I edit a lot of Osaka's writings, so I've gotten to be pretty good at it.)

well I did make an outline, but even there I was stumped. My three points were originally going to have the two I put for the 2nd and 4th paragraph and the 3rd paragraph was going to be that teens don't want to become outcasts or cast out from their friends. Then I realized that that point was much like the 1st point and I thought the teacher would think I was just repeating a point or that I was making the second point sound like it's expanding on the 1st one instead it being really another point.

Also I have been searching for sites about peer pressure. Some have help me while others have not. And I hate google anyways. grrrr.... lol. I looked for a while on the TeenMania website but nothing came up. Go figure. lol

thank you so much. I don't know about the proofreading thing, I would have to think about it but thank you so much. you have helped me alot. I'll P.M. you if I need help or anything alright?

bye, and thank you to everyone who has helped me so far thank you so much I you guys have helped me alot.

love ya everyone,
bye!

from,
Ivan

if you guys want to still give me your stories of how you've handled peer pressure you can because I still need them. I'm still working on my essay so if you guys want you can ok?

firestorm wrote:if you guys want to still give me your stories of how you've handled peer pressure you can because I still need them. I'm still working on my essay so if you guys want you can ok?

I finished it so wish me luck guys *runs to class*

Sorry I wasn't here to give any advice myself. ^_^" Hope it all went well!

Same here. All the best, Firestorm!

CreatureArt wrote:Same here. All the best, Firestorm!

that's alright guys no worry's You guys can help me with my book report! lol

firestorm wrote:that's alright guys no worry's You guys can help me with my book report! lol

Lol I know that I am being very annoying but I have to do a book report for Sing-language by tonight!!!!!! Can you guys help me? I forgot how to structure it and what to do. I know I need to summarize it. I already got what to say. I just want to know the basis of how a book report looks like. Can you guys help me?

I was gonna offer to proof read but nevermind