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i'm attempting to write a poem because i don't think i'm a good poetry writer or well fiction writer for that matter...good people to look up too are Kesshin and True noir chloe both are very talented in both matters...
sorry don't mean to seem discouraged...anyways.. this poem "okami" which is wolf in japanese is about wolves and other things....

Okami

The silver sleek and white innonence
call of the moon
enchanting yet lurid
shadows of a distant past

apparitions through the evergreen trees
eyes of owls
lovers of night

As the moon's sillouhette glow casts down
The snows faithful reflection
recounts the wolf's steps
Lightly upon the sea of glass
Running after the caribou

the okami sleek away as the dawn approach
these apparitions fall into the shadows
Metamorphis. Transformation
They are anew

Dawned in white and grey and brown
they emerge new creatures of day
with children's laughter
children's smile
the snow greets the warm sun
and the puppies howl

It is picturesque. Very visual. In other words, great imagery. Don't be all down on yourself. You are talented yourself, so write, and write some more. You only get better with experience. Reading good quality stuff can help as well. Not that I can attest to this... but I hear it does. Great work!

I liked it very much ^_^

Yes, please don't get down on yourself. You're doing really well. Please, keep writing if it's what you like to do. If you enjoy it, then you can only get better.

i'm going to attempt more poetry on here...hm...ok this next one is pretty good..i kinda like the imagery on it...

THis is called:

The Tree Flows

Clear skies dappled with gray
Impending storm
Fiery countenance
Neverending blood glistens in through tears
The tree flows

Covers and consumes
Tidal wave of grace
Shrieks and screams from the realms
Sorrow from above
Temporary grief

Beaten
with a crown of thorns
Sweat mingled with wine and blood
an overpowering stench
Sweet inscense
Death and destruction
weeping of the earth

The tree has ceased its flow
sorrow in the depths
joy above
he has won

THis one doesn't have a title..

drops of rain
fall from the man's face
blood overflows the river
world despairs

Dog's howl, cow's moo
all in grief and terror
the rocks shake and groan
The thunder rolls

People thirst for the man's blood
hunger for his bread
want and want
even then, desire for more
they steal what they don't deserve

He smiles
he gives them bread
his very body
he gives them his blood to drink
he gives his life for free
to save man from what he deserves