First chapter of my story Shrinking Violet

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First chapter of my story Shrinking Violet

Postby Alexandra-chan » Thu Jan 22, 2004 1:58 pm

Here is the first chapter of my story Shrinking Violet. Its attached to this message. Hope you like it!
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Postby true_noir_chloe » Thu Jan 22, 2004 7:37 pm

I like what little I've read. You have a great name for your protagonist - Chloe. ^_^ LOL I, however, can not read the way you have placed it here. My eyes just aren't good enough. Would you please try to post it on the thread directly? I'd really like to read the rest. ~-^

[size=84][color=seagreen]YOU SEE


You see into the deepest part of me ---

beyond the fog I hide behind.

You cast your light upon the shadows

that stretch like cobwebs in my mind.

You ease the pain when I am hurting,

and morbid visions from my past

pierce into the realm of Reason

as though I danced on blades of glass.

You grant me strength when I have fallen

and, once again, I've lost my way.

You take my hand in Yours and lead me

into the promise of a brand new day.

You bring order to all my chaos,

yet set my well-laid plans awry.

You place me on a firm foundation ---

then give me wings so I can fly.

You sand away my roughened edges

and polish all the dullest parts

until I stand before Your presence...

a newly-sculpted work of art.

You see into the heart within me,

right through my motives and selfish will.

And yet, in spite of all You see

You say You love me even still.


~by D.M.~

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Postby Mimichan » Thu Jan 22, 2004 9:00 pm

The story is off to a good start ^_^ Keep writing! I'd like to see what happens to Chloe.
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"Why do people not notice until they lose it?
What it is that's truly important...
Although I can't afford to forgive even myself,
Because you were there,
I was able to be myself (Natural).
I want to be honest...I want to be kind...
I want to be the adult I once (in my childhood) longed to be.
I go on fighting against the heart to run away...
I go on fighting against that invisible something!"
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Postby Alexandra-chan » Fri Jan 23, 2004 12:18 pm

Iesu_no_Senshi: I'm glad you liked it!

true_noir_chloe : I have the story at fictionpress.net. The url is http://www.fictionpress.com/read.php?storyid=1464418

Hope you'll be able to read it. I tried to put in on the thread awhile ago but it was to big so you'll have to give me yur email address if the letters aren't big enough.

Ja ne!
God bless!
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Postby Icarus » Fri Jan 23, 2004 2:51 pm

Interesting.
The Forsworn War of 34

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