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PostPosted: **Thu Oct 30, 2003 4:50 pm**

The siren's song
When I was young
And lived at sea
I sat on a cliff
Looking into the ocean
Looking at the waves
Turning, Writhing
Each with a word
Making the lyrics
The sercret Lyrics
Of the siren's song

What do you think?

PostPosted: **Thu Oct 30, 2003 4:57 pm**

I like it, Siren, little sister dear.

PostPosted: **Thu Oct 30, 2003 5:05 pm**

I wish I could write poems as good as you, Siren-chan.
And I knows who you are. Sarah-chan told - *Sarah-chan elbows her* Er, I figured it out all on my own... heh...

PostPosted: **Thu Oct 30, 2003 5:28 pm**

Very nice, Siren, I like it. Glad you posted some of your work.

PostPosted: **Thu Oct 30, 2003 5:36 pm**

Happened to check my new thread "Meledriel" and i came upon the poem. Very good siren... reminds me of the brine on the lips old sea yarns such as " The Wreck of the Hesperus". So that is what " On a cliff" means. Doh! :forehead:

I personally wouldn't try to write poems, I just don't have the talent for all the mechanics a poem takes. I wouldn't mind to bad if you gave a little critiscm (constructive of course :grin:

) of my little Meledriel once I have the time to write it.

Waiting patiently for customers.

PostPosted: **Thu Oct 30, 2003 5:38 pm**

Lochaber Axe wrote:Happened to check my new thread "Meledriel" and i came upon the poem. Very good siren... reminds me of the brine on the lips old sea yarns such as " The Wreck of the Hesperus". So that is what " On a cliff" means. Doh!

Don't worry, I would find it confusing too if she wasn't my little sister.

PostPosted: **Thu Oct 30, 2003 7:11 pm**

It has a very beautiful and charming rhythm. :angel:

I like it.

PostPosted: **Thu Oct 30, 2003 7:27 pm**

That was good. It almost sounds like a fragment of a larger work.

PostPosted: **Fri Oct 31, 2003 6:28 am**

Nice! Feel free to post some more stuff ... like soon.

PostPosted: **Fri Nov 07, 2003 6:28 am**

Gypsy wrote:Nice! Feel free to post some more stuff ... like soon.

I'm sorry. I am having a little problem with writers-block :sweat:

Please give me time to think of ideas

PostPosted: **Sat Nov 08, 2003 8:41 pm**

you can describe how the sun rises or sets...???

PostPosted: **Sun Nov 23, 2003 4:59 pm**

Volt wrote:you can describe how the sun rises or sets...???

sure ise dawn and dusk

PostPosted: **Sun Nov 23, 2003 8:58 pm**

"That was a nice poem," says he of little experience. Miraculously, he's right. "I agree with Technomancer about it feeling like a part of something bigger."

PostPosted: **Mon Dec 08, 2003 9:58 am**

thank you Icarus it was very nice of all of you to anwser to my peom *looks at block of wood on desk* But i wound be able to write for a while.

PostPosted: **Mon Dec 08, 2003 8:35 pm**

As Winnie the Pooh says, "oh bother." You're not going to be able to write for awhile? Why not? Your poetry is so good.

PostPosted: **Mon Dec 08, 2003 8:39 pm**

I think it's great Siren. Awesome writing.

PostPosted: **Wed Dec 31, 2003 4:19 am**

true_noir_chloe wrote:As Winnie the Pooh says, "oh bother." You're not going to be able to write for awhile? Why not? Your poetry is so good.

I have writers block :sweat:

PostPosted: **Wed Dec 31, 2003 6:36 am**

Good work. Hopefully writer's block won't last too long. Sometimes I get stuck in that mode, or I just don't make time for writing. Keep it up though.

PostPosted: **Thu Jan 01, 2004 5:34 am**

Here is a previous one I did in class
in the void
dreams fly past
falling into dark
like ripples on the water
dream shadows I once
knew gone forever
in th viod
Iam falling in the void

PostPosted: **Fri Jan 02, 2004 7:58 am**

I may like that one even better. Hey, 100 posts for me... :sweat:

I like your style of writing.

PostPosted: **Fri Jan 02, 2004 12:53 pm**

thanks

:RED:

PostPosted: **Fri Jan 02, 2004 10:44 pm**

Good job. I like this one.

PostPosted: **Sun Jan 11, 2004 7:17 am**

I am writing another it will be done sone

PostPosted: **Wed Jan 14, 2004 11:13 am**

I can't wait...

PostPosted: **Fri Jan 16, 2004 4:42 am**

that was a very good poem keep writing more!

PostPosted: **Mon Jan 19, 2004 8:36 am**

Finally read your recent poem. Very good. ^_^

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Poem: The siren's song

Poem: The siren's song