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Postby Dead-Aim » Tue Jul 19, 2005 10:17 pm

Love Forever


It’ll be the flash back,
Don’t stop, shooting to get it.
Erroneous Errors, the fact of life
Wrecking ball, back to strife.
Ha ha! Lets us break it all,
Riding the dead camel.
Lets love forever, because love is free.

Windy laughing gas, this the attack.
Watch as we navigate, then gravitate.
We don’t stop, forever is freedom.
Lets all be a hero now.
Doctor, Doctor, what is wrong
With the world today.
“Just love forever, and we will be free”

Don’t stop, get it done,
This way life is born, universal
Complacency. If it could all be erased?
Then why do we hesitate?
All hate is gone with such a simple phrase.
Don’t be afraid. Say the words.
“I love you”
"Jesus said to her, 'I am the resurrection and the life. He who believes in Me, though he may die, he shall live. And whoever lives and believes in Me shall never die. Do you believe this?'" John 11:25-26
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Postby Anna Mae » Tue Jul 26, 2005 1:30 pm

In the first line, you say "Erroneous Errors." Isn't that redundant? I'm also curious as to why you capitalized it.

Well, this certainly is an interesting poem. To me, it sounds like one of two things: either it is full of a lot of deep symbolism that I don't understand (I'd love an explanation), or it is randomness, which I do understand because that's how my mind works also.
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[i]Two vast and trunk-less legs of stone stand in the desert. Near them, on the sand, half sunk, a shattered visage lies. Round the decay of that colossal wreck, boundless and bare the lone and level sands stretch far away. On the pedestal these words are inscribed:

“My name is Ozymandias, king of kings:
look on my works, ye mighty, and despair!â€
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