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The Dragons Maid





[font=Vivaldi][size=167]Once upon an early time in the age of the knights there was a young beautiful maid who each day went to the well. When the equally young prince found this out he thought he could charm her at the well and get her hand in marriage. When the time came for the maid to do her errand the prince was waiting for her at the well. Then the maid set off for her journey through the village of Camelot. When she arrived at the well the prince was hiding in the well pretending that robbers robbed him and threw him in. When she looked in she saw someone and the prince called out “thieves have robbed me yet I am the prince,â€

Wow, this is good. I really want to find out what happens next, I really do. Great work.

here is chapter 2
Chapter 2

The missing brother

[font=Vivaldi][size=167]“What! You want to go to the palace? I will not allow it, ever.â€

i already started chapter 3 but i might put it in with chapter 4 tommorow or some other day

The plot thickens. So she is actually going to be a dragon? *looks forward to more. *

sheherazade wrote:The plot thickens. So she is actually going to be a dragon? *looks forward to more. *

i still don't know the theme but it's coming along

anyone want to give me suggestions i am totally open

hey sheher get some extra room

it's ok now

gonna start wrighting again

jesusfreakabc wrote:

i like keeping the audience in supsense

hahaha, hey! *is suspended in suspense*

here is chapter 3


[size=167][font=Vivaldi]“Tom!â€

Very interesting story. I like it, but I'm having trouble understanding who says what, because all of the dialogue is bunched up. If you could write it more like a regular book, where when a new person starts speaking, a new parpagraph starts, it would help greatly. Just a suggestion.

this is just a rough draft so don't expect it to be novel worthy

I like your story! oh, a rough draft. I don't like doing rough drafts, but that's just me. *falls off edge of seat* -.- ouch.

hey i know everyone will love this one


[size=167][font=Vivaldi]“I can’t find him anywhere Arthur.â€

hehe, I wasn't criticizing the content. Even rough drafts can be 'novel worthy'. The paragraph breaks helped a lot, by the way. Much easier to read chapter 4! Yeah!

*gets up from floor* ah, good job! oh, my, what will happen!?

thanks. like it too

Great work.

thanks i like it too

sorry i haven't been writing