Fairly Short Poems

[phinny5608]

Here's 2 poems. Feel free to just read one and/or critique just one. Besides, if you get lazy and don't want to read them both, that's fine. I get that way too.

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Warning-- This may hurt if you have close family members who drink heavily. I'm fortunate enough not to have that any more.
I'm not sure of a name for this poem.


The abrasiveness in your eyes
Tells me you’ve soaked up their lies
She says things that strike deep
“Narrow-minded Jesus-freakâ€

[Shadowchild]

i like the black and white dreams one best. curious though, why that name? i cant see how it matches with the poem... or am i just stupid. ^-^'

[phinny5608]

i like the black and white dreams one best. curious though, why that name? i cant see how it matches with the poem... or am i just stupid. ^-^'

Maybe I had intended to incorporate it into the poem (I'm not sure if I'm done with it). Either way, I think it's a cool title. I believe I've heard that 50% of your dreams are color, and 50% are black and white. Odd, huh?

[Shadowchild]

wierd... i bet you could add some more to it . that would be awesome. with me all my dreams are in c=black and white and even though i rarely ever have dreams they usually end up as nightmares. -_-