Ok, this is a work in progress. It's based on an idea I had for a graphic novel, but I'm not a very good artist. Tell me what you think so far. I should have chapter 1 before long.
In a huge castle hall stood a teenage boy. Jacob stared up at the great brick walls and the tall ceiling. This place looked like it was from before the Renaissance. At the end of the long hall was a pair of enormous doors that Jacob knew he had to open. Somehow he just felt led. Upon opening the doors, Jacob was confronted by a huge red dragon. This seemed like something out of a fantasy movie. “Leave now,â€
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meboeck - Posts: 1311
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I like the idea for this story so far -but the only thing I could say is that it's very brief. Is it meant to be a story or just the idea for one? The reason I'm confused is that things are happening so fast -from one dream to the revolution that the main character could be the one to save the world. Other than that, I like this so far.
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[Quote=Photosoph]Well, t'was a good deduction, Mr. Holmes! *salutes Mr. Myoti Sherlock Homes* [/QUOTE]
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
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Photosoph - Posts: 1528
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Photosoph wrote:I like the idea for this story so far -but the only thing I could say is that it's very brief.
Oops. This is just the prologue. Somehow that didn't make it into my post. I blame ADD. Look! A dancing banana!
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meboeck - Posts: 1311
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OOoooooOOOOoooo banana.... @_@ Eeee! He goes in time to the music in my head! Da, da, da! Da, da, da!
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[Quote=Photosoph]Well, t'was a good deduction, Mr. Holmes! *salutes Mr. Myoti Sherlock Homes* [/QUOTE]
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[Quote=Photosoph]Well, t'was a good deduction, Mr. Holmes! *salutes Mr. Myoti Sherlock Homes* [/QUOTE]
Myoti wrote:Elementary, my dear Watsoph. XD
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